Unwanted visitors
I’m wide wake my heart is pounding like I have just watched a horror film I don't know who it is but there is a knocking sound on the door. I’m not sure if this is a dream but I think I’m awake. Why would someone knock on my door at the middle of the night? BANG BANG BANG the door is opening and in comes a guy with green eyes that glow in the dark. and he is also holding a knife like he was a murder “you can no hide from Zass” says the murder. “I know you are under your blankets”.
Hi Mark.
ReplyDeleteI really liked your onomatopoeias it made it exciting!
I think you could improve by using similes.
Hi, Mark
ReplyDeleteYour story was awesome it had cool onomatopoeia.