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Friday 29 July 2016

Monday morning

Monday morning
“WAKE UP!” it was Mum I hear lightning. It was 6 am I walk to the door Lika sprints up to me. My eyes are so foggy I can hardly see my porridge. “ Do you want to go to school early?” “ok yes please.” Lika was licking my arm. and I stood up on my feet and made Lika mad and she jumped on to my hands and I spin Lika around. “Sit down Mark.” once I finished my porridge Mum said“Time to go to school.” “Ok Mum.”

At school
My first friends I sore was Declyn, Jack L and Brock then Declyn, jack and I went to shoot hoops with me.
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2 comments:

  1. Unknown12 August 2016 at 12:37

    Well done, Mark. Your goal of using punctuation is really coming along. You have some cool detail, but I would like to see more description. Could you try to include some similes next time? P.S. where is that piece of writing I asked you to post on Tuesday?

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  2. Jayden5 September 2016 at 12:15

    Hi Mark I like your capital letters and full stops and nouns.
    Next step you could do a capitol for Jack.

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